兰卡斯特大学2017年文书范文分享 全文朴素才能让亮点更突出

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编辑点评: 本文将与大家分享成功申请兰卡斯特大学2017年生物科学专业的优质文书一篇,不少申请者刻意追求文书亮点,往往会用力过猛,适得其反。一篇好的文书全文朴素显得真诚可信,同时让文章安排的亮点更加突出,才能成功俘获招生官,话不多少,双手送上文书!

在2018QS大学排名中,兰卡斯特大学排在120位,是英国TOP20高校,该校拥有英国顶尖的环境科学系以及国际知名的兰卡斯特大学管理学院(LUMS)。本文将分享成功申请该校2017年生物科学专业的文书一篇,全文内容充实,选择素材基本围绕生物学习研究展开,亮点则在首尾,一起来欣赏吧。

Recently, while reading a BBC news article, something caught my attention – a clinical trial investigating aspirin’s effects on preventing the relapse of cancer in humans. The drug works by making the platelets less sticky. By reducing the platelets’ stickiness, aspirin makes it harder for them to carry and distribute the cancer cells. A disease that has had disastrous consequences since the beginning of time could potentially be halted by an ancient painkiller.
点评:首段以一篇在BBC上看到的文章入手,整段只谈了该文主要内容——研究阿司匹林对预防人类癌症复发的影响。关于申请者本身未提一字,但字里行间都透露着申请者对生物的深刻理解与喜爱,手段高!
It is this constant journey of finding unexpected connections that makes me so passionate about biology. I was lucky enough to be given the opportunity to attend a biology workshop at the University of Cambridge where I learnt more about genetic mutations. The idea that one mutation in a code consisting of countless letters can cause such severe diseases seems almost unfathomable.
点评:承接手段,点出主旨句——so passionate about biology.申请者提到参加剑桥研讨会的经历,这绝对是加分的。
During my AS course last year, I learnt about cystic fibrosis in more detail. I was in awe at learning how the biological mechanisms that control the water content in cells do not work properly and how genetically inheriting a faulty gene from your parents can cause an individual to suffer a life threatening condition. This is why I am particularly looking forward to studying genetics and evolution.
点评:进一步谈在生物上的学习,以专门领域的学习研究做详细解读,重点突出且以小见大。段末不忘再强调下主题。

Currently studying maths and chemistry has allowed me to develop techniques and advanced numerical skills, essential to biological modelling and in instances where quantitative reasoning is required to interpret data from investigations. I studied Religious Studies at AS Level and the subject opened up my mind to various philosophical approaches to ethical dilemmas which will prove invaluable when being faced with moral conflicts during experiments and research projects.
点评:申请者谈所具备的其他知识储备,包括数学、化学和哲学,这些同样可以运用到生物中。招生官对知识架构全面的学生那是相当爱啊!
Beyond relevant content, my A2 studies have taught me many transferable skills such as decision making, organising my own work and coordinating it with others. My role as class representative in the school council for four years has aided me in developing leadership and has increased my confidence. I have also acted as a student ambassador on many occasions, volunteering at various events in school such as open days and family days. Being part of the STEM Academy in my school’s Career Academy has granted me many opportunities throughout sixth form, such as a summer internship at a hospital, where I grasped knowledge and experience in the world of work. I was exposed to an environment which taught me a great amount in relation to the various roles within a healthcare environment. I am community driven and last year I graduated from the National Citizens Service, where I and eleven other young people were awarded funding to create a social campaign to benefit a local charity supporting refugees.
点评:通常这个位置就是安排课外实践活动的,申请者谈到了做学生会的班代表,成为学生大使,在开放日和家庭日做志愿者,以及在医院做实习生等。这些经历让其具备了组织决策及领导的能力。
The biological world around us is magical and I hope to one day have the chance to explore it further; I am eager and ready to discover and learn more about it on an intellectual level. A visit to the Wellcome Trust Collection gave me the opportunity to look at a scripted form of the human genome. Flicking through the pages I was overwhelmed by the innumerable letters that code for an individual person. It really put into perspective the vast amount of scientific knowledge that is present in the world and how it is a field that will only advance in the future, and I would love to be a part of this. I aspire to one day be a part of the development of treatments for the unfortunate occurrence of genetic diseases.
点评:最后一段进行升华,谈了对生物的美好憧憬,并借助了一段具体的叙事——参观Wellcome Trust Collection,了解人类基因组,表达对人类遗传病研究的浓厚兴趣与志向。

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