15天搞定雅思写作 Task 1 -Day 1 Describing a Graph Over Time

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本篇文章将讲解雅思写作中出现的与描述时间的相关表达。采用一个bar chart作为实例,但是所用技巧同样适合line graph。

在描述表格或图表时,第一件要做的事情就是检查有没有时间轴,如果有的话,在整篇文章的语言方面要注意在语言上体现时间的变化

仅仅表达出每一个事物随时间而产生的变化是远远不够的。还需要阐述事物之间的联系。

好好读读雅思之前的真题,你就会发现每一道题目,都对数据之间的对比和区别提出了要求,在观察数据的时候要注意把数据放在同一个要求背景下统一对比,得出更加条理化,协调的答案。

为了达到上述要求,在分析数据的时候,一定要注意数据之间的区别与相似处。把有用的信息用逻辑整理好之后,在写出来。

在不会写的时候千万不要瞎写,多看看优秀的文章。我们先来看一个示例,然后通过Language of Change,Making Comparisons,Grouping the Data,这三个方面好好分析一下:

The bar chart shows the number of times per week (in 1000s), over five weeks, that three computer packages were downloaded from the internet.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

 

Model Answer:

The bar chart illustrates the download rate per week of ActiveX, Java and Net computer packages over a period of five weeks. It can clearly be seen that ActiveX was the most popular computer package to download, whilst Net was the least popular of the three.

To begin, downloads of ActiveX and Java showed similar patterns, with both gradually increasing from week 1 to week 5. However, the purchases of Active X remained significantly higher than for the other product over this time frame. In week 1, purchases of ActiveX stood at around 75,000, while those for Java were about 30,000 lower. With the exception of a slight fall in week 4, downloading of ActiveX kept increasing until it reached a peak in the final week of just over 120,000. Java downloads also increased at a steady rate, finishing the period at 80,000.

The product that was downloaded the least was Net. This began at slightly under 40,000, and, in contrast to the other two products, fell over the next two weeks to reach a low of approximately 25,000. It then increased sharply over the following two weeks to finish at about 50,000, which was well below that of ActiveX.
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现在我们就来看一下怎样通过之前讲的三个方面来分析这篇Sample吧!

Language of Change

就像你在篇范文中看到的:很多地方都能体会到用词的变换,所以在写文章之前一起来看看有哪些词汇是可以用来替换的吧!
gradually increasing
a slight fall
kept rising
reached a peak
increased at a steady rate
fell
increased sharply
a low of
finish at
stood at
finishing the period at

做这道题目如果不经常更换同义词,会被考官认为掌握的词汇和句型太少,毕竟是有应试的成分在,所以不能像口语一样讲究实用性,一定要合理炫技!没有捷径,也不要自己瞎写,就是要多背句型,然后把已掌握的句型巧妙地运用在文章里。

Making Comparisons

写作第一部分确实不需要个人想法的表达,只要写出你所看到的就行,但是这也不代表不需要再数据之间进行对比。

就这道题而言,如果你只写出Java数据发生了什么变化而不涉及到Java与另外两项的联系,是不能够得高分的。

加粗的部分是数据对比很好的例子,大家来体会一下:

It can clearly be seen that ActiveX was the most popular computer package to download, whilst Net was the least popular of the three Downlaods of ActiveX and Java showed similar patterns, with both gradually increasing from week 1 to week 5 However, the purchases of Active X remained significantly higher than for the other product over this time frame.

In week 1, purchases of ActiveX stood at around 75,000,while those for Java were about 30,000 lower Java downloads also increased at a steady rate, finishing the period at 80,000 The product that was downloaded the least was Net. This began at slightly under 40,000, and, in contrast to the other two products, fell over the next two weeks
It then increased sharply over the following two weeks to finish at about 50,000, which was well below that of ActiveX.

Grouping the Data

再给文章分段落的时候,可以根据分析到数据的特点将文章分段,每一段都有针对性的去阐述问题。

经过观察后不难看出ActiveX and Java有着同样的增长模式,都是在特定时期稳定层增长,虽然在week4 的时候有轻微下降。所以可以整合成如下段落:

To begin, dowloads of ActiveX and Java showed a similar trend, with both gradually increasing from week 1 to week 5. However, the purchases of Active X remained significantly higher than for the other product over this time frame. In week 1, purchases of ActiveX stood at around 75,000, while those for Java were about 30,000 lower. With the exception of a slight fall in week 4, downloading of ActiveX kept rising until it reached a peak in the final week of just over 120,000. Java downloads also increased at a steady rate, finishing the period at 80,000.

On the other hand, Net is the lowest and it has a different pattern – falling and then rising again. So this could be described in another paragraph:

The product that was downloaded the least was Net. This began at slightly under 40,000, and, in contrast to the other two products, fell over the next two weeks to a low of approximately 25,000. It then increased sharply over the following two weeks to finish at about 50,000, which was well below that of ActiveX.

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