2013年6月6日A类雅思小作文解析
图表类型:饼状图
作文题目:Two pie charts give information about energy forms used in Australia in 2008 and a prediction for 2030.
写作要点:
可以参考C7T4(同为energy相关内容)和C9T3(同为过去和将来两个时间点)
注意:
1. 总体overview的写作,比如traditional fossil fuels were and will remain to be major choices
2. 注意大小描述和上升下降描述的结合,同时要体现出对比
3. 注意时态的应用
出现频率分析
饼图一月份出现两次:1月5日和1月19日。之后只有在3月2日出现过一次。下半年再考到的可能性会加大。
2013年6月6日A类雅思大作文解析
作文题目:It is a government’s responsibility to provide financial support to old people after they retire or individuals should save money for themselves.
提问方式: Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
题材类别: 政府、老龄化
旧题回顾:老龄化问题近三年体现出了一年一考的特征
2012.03.10 There is a higher proportion of older people than younger people. Do you think it is a positive or negative development?
2011.10.08 Around the world, the proportion of the elderly people is increasing constantly. To what extent do you agree that it brings more positive effects than negative effects?
2010.03.06老龄化对individuals和society有什么影响
2008.06.28 With technology speeding up, more and more young people begin to use mobile phones and the Internet, but old people have little chance to be exposed to them. What ways could mobile phone and the Internet be useful to old people? How do old people be encouraged to use this new technology?
写作思路分析:该题目看似只是写老龄化的问题,但是和政府结合在一起之后,其实并不好写。首先学生在论证时最好涉及到政府financial support相关的词汇,否则会写得过于general。 其次,国内的养老和国外的养老其实又有所差异,所以国内考生如何表达清楚观点也是一个小难点。
参考文章结构安排:
第一段:开头段-补充背景,转述话题
一方:政府需要提供financial support
1、 政府有职责服务公众,特别老年人这一类的“弱势群体”
2、 老年人对于社会有贡献,理应获得相应的“回报”
另一方:个人需要有积蓄
1、 政府的帮助对象太多,可能负担过重,个人应当有所分担
2、 个人一定的积蓄可以降低风险,而不至于完全依赖于社会
3、 可以帮助个人形成一定程度上的节俭
结尾立场:两者都需要,priority可以视不同类型的国家而定
参考范文:
Majority of human beings have been blessed by the peace and prosperityafter Second World War which in turn has brought about the booming ofpopulation. Not only has the number of people been rising dramatically, life expectancyin most countries has also witnessed noticeable increases. That, however, poses dire challenge of how tosupport the aging population.
Those who call for financial support from state or municipal government harbor the perception that “government by the people should indeed serve the people”, especially disadvantaged ones like the elderly. Education for the children and employment opportunities for the young are among statesmen’s top priorities, yet equally important is the need of the senior ones who appear comparatively senile now but may have devoted all their life to the society, be it agriculture and industrial production or the making of policies or laws.
Opponents, in contrast, are concerned about whether the huge number of elderly people might have become “unbearable heaviness” for the whole society. Pension for an increasing number of retired workers could amount to astronomical figures, which is unlikely to be alleviated in the future due to the fact that many now will keep drawing the pension for more than twenty years. Besides, the fund spent on areas like constructing nursing houses for lonely aged people could add to the burden. Under such circumstances, individuals should take part of the responsibility by saving a certain proportion of their income before retirement or trying to stay in their position slightly longer if their health permits.
Personally, I would say government and individuals are never independent of each other, so confronting the challenging of an aging society calls for efforts from both sides. However, the priority might differ in various countries: while the developing countries need to invest more on improving the pension or overall welfare system, individuals who are enjoying the benefits in developed countries should try to save money for themselves so as to share the pressure of their governments.
词汇拓展:
Pension 养老金
Nursing houses 养老院
Booming of population 人口增长
welfare system 福利体系
peace and prosperity 和平与繁荣
municipal government 市政府
disadvantaged people 弱势群体