常远新托福写作真经----2012年10月19日北美真题及范文

Introduction

思路拓展让步式开头，引出中心论点：如今的年轻人对世界做出的贡献更为重要→延伸论点：年轻人具备什么样的条件

中心论点

Every generation of young people has had its champions(支持者)for improving living conditions, and making the worldaround them a better place; however, young people todayare playing more crucial roles in making great contribution andbringing real evolution to the world.

延伸论点

Young people now have the time, the inclination(意向), themeans and the education to help their communitiesthroughoutthe world.

Essay Body

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思路拓展本段论点：现在的年轻人通过先进的技术更多地融入世界→解释中心论点，层层递进→举例→总结

本段论点

First, young people now are actively getting involved inwhat goes on around them and contribute more to the worldbecause of advances in technology.

解释论点

When browsing any form of web media or online socialnetworks, it’s easy to see how young people have beengetting more involved in social causes and exchanging theirideas more freely than in the past.

大部分考生表达“如果上网浏览就不难发现……”时，往往会用if you surf online, you would… 这种“地球人都知道”的表达方式，老外会怎样表达？请参考本句。

举例

For example, social media such as Facebook has changedhow we meet and stay in touch with people by providing aplatform to discover people who share the same interests. Anda Twitter search will likely turn up other people talking aboutthe same subject as you.

结论

By these new means, it is easier for young people today togaininsight into domestic and international affairs, share their ideas,encourage each other, as well as organize activities and spreadtheir messages to bring about changes in the world.

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思路拓展本段论点：世界各地越来越多的年轻人为保护环境和野生动物而奋战→解释论点→举例→总结：现在的很多年轻人在为这个世界更美好而奉献力量

本段论点

Furthermore, more and more young people today are fightingfor environmental and wild animal preservation all over theworld.

解释论点

We can see them sacrificing their time to help protect ourenvironment via media such as Discovery Channel.

举例

I once heard about a young woman environmentalist wholived alone on an island in the East Indian Ocean for overfive years, conducting her research on the negative impact ofenvironmental changes on sea animals and thus calling forimmediate action from the government.

结论

This is just one example that shows how youth are indeedgiving their time and energy to improve the world.

Conclusion

思路拓展再次阐明中心论点→总结：很多年轻人在积极参与社会活动

重申中心论点

I would definitely agree that young people are more involved in making the world a better place now than in the past.

总结全文

Instead of immediately settling down, getting married, or investing their time in a career, many graduates are actively participating in important parts of their society by the Internet and devoting a lot of time and energy to social causes like environmental preservation.