常远新托福写作真经----2012年09月15日北美真题及范文

所属专题:托福写作备考全集合  来源:沪江留学网    要点:常远新托福写作真经  
编辑点评: 《常远新托福写作真经》由新航道托福名师常远编著,是新托福写作真经的最新版,抢先收录20套最新北美区托福写作真题,这些真题均极有可能再次出现在中国大陆区的新托福考试中。

新托福独立写作:2012年09月15日北美真题及范文

Task 2: Writing Based on Knowledge and Experience

Directions: You have 30 minutes to plan and complete your essay.

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?

A teacher’s performance should be evaluated by students rather than by otherteachers.

Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

思路拓展和标准范文

Introduction

 

思路拓展改写题目→模板式套话→引出中心论点:我认为教师和学生都应该参与对老师的教学评估

模板式套话

This is a complex issue.

破题

In regard to the evaluation of teachers and theirperformance,some believe that they should be evaluated by other teachers,while others think they should be judged by their students.

如果开头实在不知道如何展开,可以简单地复述题目。

中心论点

 

I believe that a teacher should be evaluated by both teachers andstudents. In my opinion, only in this way can a teacher be judgedfairly.

习惯了一边倒的论证,本文带给大家另一种段落展开方式,即结合两种说法和观点。

Essay Body

Paragraph 1

思路拓展本段论点:只由学生参与评估会产生问题→解释本段论点→总结

本段论点

To begin with, I do not agree that teachers should be rated bytheir students alone, as this is incredibly problematic.

解释论点

Students are likely to judge teachers by how well they like ordislike that teacher and not necessarily on the quality of theirlessons. If a male teacher is very handsome, or a female teacheris very beautiful, they may receive higher scores from students ofthe opposite sex. If a teacher doesn’t give homework, or allows hisor her students to watch movies in class, then they may receivehigher marks than they deserve.

结论

This is especially true of teenagers in secondary school.

为了避免例子以偏概全,可以加这么一句话,这样显得很全面。

Paragraph 2

思路拓展本段论点:只让其他教师来给某个教师做评估也有失公允→解释论点:为什么有失公允→举例:我的一个历史老师的遭遇→总结

本段论点

On the other hand, it would also be a mistake to allow onlyteachers to judge other teachers on their performance.

解释论点

Since other teachers are also workmates, competition betweenworkmates is inevitable, which might result in biased judgment.

举例

One of my history professors is very knowledgeable, with a goodreputation among students for his expertise in history. However, hewas not welcomed by other professors in the history departmentdue to the jealousy of other teachers.

结论

As you can imagine, competition between teachers mightresult in negative feelings such as hatred, envy, and suspicion.Therefore, teachers might not always judge other teachers’performances fairly.

仅由老师之间互相评估会有什么问题。

Conclusion

思路拓展重申原因:两种评价各有问题→因此评价要结合两者

重申原因

In regard to teacher evaluation, there are manycomplexities andinherent(内在的,固有的) problems.

结论

The best way to assess the actual quality of instruction would beto measure teachers’ reviews of their peers, the students’ reviewsof their instructors, and finally to take into account all the examscores of the students. Rating teachers’ performance is a complexissue. Including both other teachers’ and students’ evaluationswould be a good step in evaluating teachersfairly.

美国人写作会用到的句式

This is especially true of teenagers in secondary school.这种情况在中学生中尤为 常见。

标准范文译文

关于如何对教师及其教学质量进行评估,有些人认为应当由其他教师来评估,而另一些人认为应当由学生来评估。这是个复杂的问题。我认为,教师应当由其他教师和学生共同评估。在我看来,只有这种方式才能给教师一个公正的评估。

首先,我不赞成只由学生来评估教师,因为这会产生极大问题。学生评估教师时很可能带着主观情绪,未必会依据课堂质量做出评估。如果一名男教师非常英俊,或者一名女教师非常漂亮,他们很可能得到异性学生更高的评分。如果某位教师不留家庭作业,或者允许学生在课堂上看电影,那他/她很可能得到很高的评分,但事实上他/她并不该得到这样高的分数。这种情况在中学生中尤为常见。

另一方面,只由其他教师评估某位教师的教学质量的做法也是错误的。由于其他教师是同事,而同事之间的竞争不可避免,这就可能会导致带有偏见的评估。我的一位历史学教授学识渊博、专业素养很高,因而在学生中有很高的威望。但由于历史系其他教授的嫉妒,他在系里并不受欢迎。你可以想象,教师之间的竞争会引起很多负面情绪,例如憎恨、嫉妒和猜疑。因此,教师不一定总能公正地评估其他教师的教学质量。

教师评估这一程序存在其复杂性,也有许多固有的缺陷。评估教学质量最好的方法就是参考其他教师和学生两方面的意见,再结合学生的考试成绩进行综合评定。评估教师的教学质量是个十分复杂的问题,综合考虑其他教师和学生的评估会是公正测评教师教学质量的一种合理方式。

>>点击查看托福写作备考全集合专题,阅读更多相关文章!

最新2024常远新托福写作真经信息由沪江留学网提供。

请输入错误的描述和修改建议,建议采纳后可获得50沪元。

错误的描述:

修改的建议: