Topic：Should teenagers work?
In some countries, teenagers have jobs while they are still students. Do you think this is a good idea? Support your opinion by using specific reasons and details.
参考分析：
注意审题，是teenager而不是college students。Teenagers have jobs，这显然是一个BAD idea。Teenager，意指十几岁的孩子——16岁或者18岁以下(18岁以上就是adult了，16、7的孩子往往被称之为young adults。参见：[61])。雇用童工(Employing children labor)目前在很多国家是非法(illegal)的。也违反国际儿童保护条约(International Children Act )。允许雇用童工，或存在童工现象，都是一个国家落后愚昧的表现。不要说teenager打工可以锻炼自我，teenager需要的是接受教育，健康成长。也不要说teenager打工可以认识社会，teenager还不具备足够的心理承受能力(psychological endurance)，过早步入社会(early exposure to the real world)，只能导致世界观、价值观(out look of world, value, etc.)的扭曲(deteriorated; distorted)。
范文：
学习期间打工是一个好主意：
（1）能够从工作中学习实际的经验，将书本的东西用到工作中。
（2）挣了钱，能够减轻父母的财政压力。
（3）学习更加合理的管理时间。
In some countries, teenagers have jobs while they are still students. After thinking about it from several aspects, I do not believe it is a good idea. The reasons are presented below.
Part-time jobs may affect students' academic studies. Working several hours a day consumes（=spend）a lot of time and one might be too exhausted to study. The main purpose of school life for teenagers is to learn scientific knowledge and techniques in preparation for their future. It is generally suggested that in order to master what they have learned at school, students must spend at least 3 hours each day on their homework. It would be impossible for a student to work part-time while maintaining a high standard of academic learning. As a result, they may find it hard to adjust to what the school and society expects from them as well as what their employers expect them to perform on the job.
Another reason why I do not approve（赞成）teenagers to work part-time is that working while studying will deprive（剥夺）their time of sleep and will do harm to their health. Teenagers are in the process of（in the process of意为在…时期）building up their body. They need time to do exercises and engage（吸引，参加）in other activities, and they also need plenty of rest. If they work, they may sacrifice their time for sleep, club activities, exercise, and recreation（娱乐；消遣）.Sometimes, teenagers have jobs that consume more strength than they can afford. This will be definitely harmful to their health.
Finally, working part-time and making extra money may contribute to their bad habits. Teenagers are not mature enough to spend money wisely. However with part-time jobs they make money that allow them to spend whatever way they like, such as playing electronic games, smoking, drinking, and even gambling.
Based on the above discussion, I do not think it is a good idea for teenagers to work while they are still students. Compared with their whole lifetime, school life is a short period. Teenagers should value their school life and make full use of the time. Only by working hard during school life can they find their proper jobs（合适的工作）in their future life.
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