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2014.8.30托福独立作文范文+解析
谢侃(侃哥Kevin)
【题】Do you agreeor disagree with the following statement: Compared with the ability to make new friends easily, the ability to maintain friendship with a small group of people is more important and decides your happiness.
题型:对比题
论点:让步
角度:原因挖掘
开头:保持老朋友间的友谊更为重要。(话题引入+他人观点+明确立场+过渡)
As social creatures, people make friends all the time. Old friends serve as the emotional reliance while some newly made friends are of practical value. Thus, a debate confronts us here on which one is more important: the ability to maintain friendship or the ability to get to know new people? The way I see it, it is more meaningful that we are able to maintain long-term friendship with a handful of people. My reasons and examples are given below. (80 words)
中间段1:和少数固定几个人的友谊比大量结识的新朋友更牢固和稳定。(主题句+说理论证+细节例子)
Firstly, friendship in a small circle is more solid and stable. For the sake of networking, a large number of people we get to know in various social occasions are actually so-called "situational friends" who just come and go in our life. Taking my father for example, he is a salesman with complicated social connections. I always find him socializing here and there, but he once told me that he could not even remember their names. Compared with those situational friends, I prefer a stable relationship with those who can give me a sense of secure. (96 words)
中间段2:和少数固定朋友维持友谊能给你生活带来更多的帮助。(主题句+说理论证+细节例子)
Secondly, maintaining the friendship with a few people brings lasting and genuine benefits to our life. On account of our limited energy and time, we are unlikely to expand the circle of friends and invest in each one of them emotionally. In stead, if we sincerely focus on several people worth making friends with, they will treat us just like how we treat them. For example, I am not a person good at socializing, but I do have a couple of congenial friends whom I have known since primary school. We often visit each other and help each other. Together we make it easier to live in this world. (109 words)
让步段:当然,不是说容易交朋友的能力就不重要,也有好处,比如有急事还是要认识一些人帮忙会更顺利。但是如果不稳定投入,这些新朋友是经不起时间考验的。(承认漏洞+补漏)
Admittedly, I am not saying that the ability to make new friends quickly is not important. This kind of skill does have its value. For instance, when we are in troubles, new friends could probably help us out if they happened to be useful. However, in most cases, the relationship with new friends cannot withstand the test of time if both of us fail to persistently invest in each other emotionally and economically. (73words)
结尾:重申观点+归纳理由/升华主题
To put it in a nutshell, the ability to maintain lasting friendship with a few persons outweighs that of getting acquaintance with new people easily. As a famous quotes goes, "God gave us relatives, but thank God we can choose ourfriends." For friends, quantity does not matter, and what really matters is endurance and dependence. (56 words)
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